28 June 2013

"Domain" #Fridayflash



The taste and hint of the arising situation beckoned at the horizon like a low cloud. A wounded Titan of attitude, with the fortitude of a newborn prince. I smacked my hands together, knowing  the day should bring new possibilities, but a storm brewed at the fraying edge, a coffee that had stood too long. 

Tornadoes held domain over the open highway before my time. Dusty radials leaned against the splintered wall of an empty stable. Wind howled through the knotholes with a wolf’s cry as winter crept in.

The terrible ring of a plastic, beige motel room phone. My face was a landslide of emotions as words stung like killer bees. A swarm of change awaited beyond the peeling blue-gray door.

A shower. 

Dressed in an empty parking lot, I offered my body to the rain. Lightning concluded its argument. I had shit to do.


12 comments:

  1. Alright, no need to show off, young lady!!

    Your words just blow me away. "Wind howled through the knotholes with a wolf’s cry..."

    You are so damn good at this :)

    Paul

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  2. Yay welcome back Carrie! And no one does modern Gothic quite like you. Even the act of rousing oneself for the day drips with atmosphere & significance through your language!


    marc nash

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  3. Eff yeah! I enjoyed this a great deal, for its spirit of insisting to accomplish. Also the great line about lightning concluding its argument.

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  4. Rolled the dice, won a round against the sky. Well done.

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  5. Powerful, lyrical and resonant.. with a defiant "don't fuck with me" swagger... reminded me of Jim Morrison's apocalyptic poetry

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  6. Love this Carrie! What I like most about it is that it can be read literally or metaphorically and both works, quite well.
    Your work is nothing short of brilliant.

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  7. Whoa! Everybody get out of her way! Nice one.

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  8. Really liked that last line! LOL

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  9. You always make such a splash when you come back! Nice to have another flash from you. *hugs*

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  10. Beautifully straddles the horizon between poetry and prose.

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