tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post2598544129777575770..comments2023-10-04T15:58:45.991-05:00Comments on Mindspeak: "Blue" #FridayflashCarrie Clevengerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-37471621916291327402013-10-16T16:05:51.859-05:002013-10-16T16:05:51.859-05:00I learned about this fridayflash stuff through a c...I learned about this fridayflash stuff through a comment you made on somebody else's blog. Hope you keep on going with this, you've got a really good narrative sense!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-67682179131917664312013-08-23T12:20:18.061-05:002013-08-23T12:20:18.061-05:00Excellent tension from the beginning, and the imag...Excellent tension from the beginning, and the imagery is wonderful. I love the title and the way you tied it up at the end. Great story.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-21958580368546965572013-08-18T19:42:31.157-05:002013-08-18T19:42:31.157-05:00So much to like in this! Cool.So much to like in this! Cool.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-64009748606727759842013-08-18T07:37:33.072-05:002013-08-18T07:37:33.072-05:00Sad story. Good buildup to Frankie and Jerry's...Sad story. Good buildup to Frankie and Jerry's fates.liminalfictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08762010680878316253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-47367146498494950032013-08-17T16:02:16.432-05:002013-08-17T16:02:16.432-05:00You are a true wordsmith.You are a true wordsmith.J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-47897062045254903022013-08-17T09:29:02.816-05:002013-08-17T09:29:02.816-05:00What really did this for me was the narrative tone...What really did this for me was the narrative tone -- not entirely without empathy, but toughened and reconciled to the reality of the situation. <br /><br />And I agree with Icy about the last line!Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-56542872294273006182013-08-17T08:36:18.418-05:002013-08-17T08:36:18.418-05:00Yes, that twenty to twelve breaths was a heart-wre...Yes, that twenty to twelve breaths was a heart-wrencher. Excellent story Carrie!Deanna Schrayerhttp://deannaschrayer.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-85997586011170883242013-08-17T00:19:35.489-05:002013-08-17T00:19:35.489-05:00Mighty fine story, Carrie. I loved the use of diff...Mighty fine story, Carrie. I loved the use of different colours throughout and the line John mentioned about breaths was fantastic. <br />Beautiful last line, too.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAdam Bhttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-365286123283469502013-08-16T22:48:11.889-05:002013-08-16T22:48:11.889-05:00Always been a fan of your word-smithing and the fo...Always been a fan of your word-smithing and the following line explains it perfectly...<br /><br />"I spread on a buttered smile."<br /><br />Perfect!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05519654261449253093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-34880187256063886982013-08-16T05:07:55.217-05:002013-08-16T05:07:55.217-05:00That last line wrapped it all up so neatly. Bravo!...That last line wrapped it all up so neatly. Bravo!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-18901311230270577222013-08-16T02:07:57.277-05:002013-08-16T02:07:57.277-05:00The transition from twenty breaths to twelve had a...The transition from twenty breaths to twelve had a surprising kick for me. Not sure why that line landed so well, but pleasant that it did. Fine story, Carrie!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.com