tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post5416946744573635655..comments2023-10-04T15:58:45.991-05:00Comments on Mindspeak: "All of Me" #FridayflashCarrie Clevengerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-14256087226837863782010-03-08T17:04:31.868-06:002010-03-08T17:04:31.868-06:00"Why did we have to be this way?"
Now T..."Why did we have to be this way?"<br /><br />Now THAT's a good question. Very powerful words throughout.~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-25031994853176957402010-03-07T22:36:20.777-06:002010-03-07T22:36:20.777-06:00I took the ending literally in my first reading, b...I took the ending literally in my first reading, but then after reconsidering and reading thru the comments, it seems like it can really take on so many meanings. It can be literal, metaphorical, spiritual or somewhere in between as in the antipsychotic that Linda mentions. I love that it's open to interpretation - well done.PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-77366103096583752062010-03-07T10:15:17.231-06:002010-03-07T10:15:17.231-06:00I'm late to the party, but I come bearing chee...I'm late to the party, but I come bearing cheese, so all is forgiven, right? ;)<br /><br />You, my dear, are the queen of twists. You tore out MY heart with this one. So where's my robotic replacement heart? GIMME.<br /><br />Final thoughts: quietly explosive, then empowering in a sad way. A study in contradictions.Kristy Baxterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07720394064601831599noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-47930103766355377452010-03-06T12:33:49.316-06:002010-03-06T12:33:49.316-06:00So, Jesus was a robot? I could see it.So, Jesus was a robot? I could see it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-46562698305517793192010-03-06T10:40:27.890-06:002010-03-06T10:40:27.890-06:00Didn't expect the scifi twist at the end. Well...Didn't expect the scifi twist at the end. Well done.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-54385542176015087402010-03-06T09:56:10.159-06:002010-03-06T09:56:10.159-06:00I wanna be a robot, too! I wanna be a robot, too!
...I wanna be a robot, too! I wanna be a robot, too!<br /><br />An all-killing, no-feeling robotic death-machine.Danhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09582303320158769492noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-20828357741969414932010-03-05T17:20:09.765-06:002010-03-05T17:20:09.765-06:00That's one way to get out of an abusive relati...That's one way to get out of an abusive relationship. Well written!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-50556890893020142752010-03-05T12:34:37.503-06:002010-03-05T12:34:37.503-06:00First, the joke response to our opening paragraph....First, the joke response to our opening paragraph...<br /><br />Jesus: No.<br /><br />Now the real response...<br /><br />I agree with Anton that "acquiesce" feels wrong there. The armor not being heavy doesn't feel triumphant enough either - better if it's heavy and it doesn't matter because of strength. The first half jumps around a lot in voice, but it works better like you've got more of a grasp on it. Does that make sense?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-1054454217349831982010-03-05T11:18:55.170-06:002010-03-05T11:18:55.170-06:00I loved the metaphor the ending represented. Brill...I loved the metaphor the ending represented. Brilliant Carrie.Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-77318146782075244572010-03-05T07:40:09.371-06:002010-03-05T07:40:09.371-06:00Great ending - it suggests so much more than it sh...Great ending - it suggests so much more than it shows.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-15766701664499011182010-03-05T03:42:59.996-06:002010-03-05T03:42:59.996-06:00Fascinating, how much sh*** people will put up wit...Fascinating, how much sh*** people will put up with only so they can stay in an unhealthy relationship. I think you captured most of it quite well.Diandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14570498251611083259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-34343961535640178282010-03-05T03:07:49.058-06:002010-03-05T03:07:49.058-06:00"This wasn't love, this was prison" ..."This wasn't love, this was prison" and "I'd rather be extinct" are wonderful lines. They still didn't tip me off to the second part though, didn't see that coming and that isn't always easy to do. Well done.<br /><br />Marc NashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-65249231273988244592010-03-05T00:16:18.620-06:002010-03-05T00:16:18.620-06:00“Gone were the soft curves…” So much sadness. I th...“Gone were the soft curves…” So much sadness. I thought the ending was horrific rather than empowering. It seemed cold and empty. Intriguing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16177454409126481626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-89225694329846657362010-03-04T23:11:53.136-06:002010-03-04T23:11:53.136-06:00I liked this.
I almost felt myself flinch with he...I liked this.<br /><br />I almost felt myself flinch with her and I agree with elizabeth, love the final metaphor in the end.Benjamin Solahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10657105522335752577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-67950525268474961702010-03-04T21:39:25.645-06:002010-03-04T21:39:25.645-06:00Ooh, cyborg warrior.Ooh, cyborg warrior.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10076907555584959149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-75521346320267465972010-03-04T21:26:06.850-06:002010-03-04T21:26:06.850-06:00That titanium heart could be an antipsychotic or a...That titanium heart could be an antipsychotic or any other heart-numbing substance. Powerful little flash... Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-90688058320277639632010-03-04T21:17:12.650-06:002010-03-04T21:17:12.650-06:00Love it, as usual. Powerful emotions without havin...Love it, as usual. Powerful emotions without having to spell it out, nice jarring contrast, and just flat-out great storytelling. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-64643218276532901422010-03-04T20:57:15.299-06:002010-03-04T20:57:15.299-06:00What Tony said.
Also, your story about the crappy ...What Tony said.<br />Also, your story about the crappy relationship she was in was all too raw and real.<br />I imagine Linda Hamilton in this piece, taking it up the yin-yang at the beginning and then kicking some Terminator butt at the end.<br />Well said!Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-3569534612102762952010-03-04T20:51:19.385-06:002010-03-04T20:51:19.385-06:00Wow Carrie. . . how do you do so much without sayi...Wow Carrie. . . how do you do so much without saying so much?<br /><br />Another perfect tale. . . I'm sure you know that already but I'd figure I'd let you know that. . . another perfect tale! :)<br /><br />JimJim Bronyaurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09580674307591916148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-8558721267953167742010-03-04T20:47:58.878-06:002010-03-04T20:47:58.878-06:00Definitely haunting. I love the juxtaposition.
On...Definitely haunting. I love the juxtaposition.<br /><br />One little thing, I'd have liked a little more external description in the first bit so the transition to the second part wouldn't be so jarring. Unless of course it was representative of transition in mindset as well as narrative then ignore me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-12418457926579625242010-03-04T20:17:59.208-06:002010-03-04T20:17:59.208-06:00This was a heavy piece. So right in there with he...This was a heavy piece. So right in there with her real, and then fly to pieces cyber punk at the end. I like the ambiguity.Pamila Paynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14398900249578356483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-55313522748049331192010-03-04T19:07:14.179-06:002010-03-04T19:07:14.179-06:00You captured this character so well, the feelings ...You captured this character so well, the feelings of desolation & wanting to be dead rather than put up with this life.<br /><br />The twist had me wondering if this was symbolic of how she felt, or another alien world where surgery is done in this manner - symbolic or real, this is an amazing world of yours.Anne Tyler Lordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16909141266966569378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-83676527214281945502010-03-04T18:52:12.185-06:002010-03-04T18:52:12.185-06:00This wasn’t love. This was prison.
You mean there...This wasn’t love. This was prison.<br /><br />You mean there is a difference???? Great flash Carrie.Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-29661217643969919962010-03-04T18:25:54.921-06:002010-03-04T18:25:54.921-06:00Sad and brilliant. A life pushed into cybernetic o...Sad and brilliant. A life pushed into cybernetic oblivion as the only means to live.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5375968406108179327.post-38765158286309767742010-03-04T18:04:55.214-06:002010-03-04T18:04:55.214-06:00It's powerful in the first half, empowering in...It's powerful in the first half, empowering in the second. It's a shame she felt she had to trade away her humanity to gain freedom and independence.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.com